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Wednesday, May 6, 2015

Writing Exercise - The Diamond Poem

By Ashley Lister

One of the reasons why I advocate using poetry as a warm up exercise for writing is because it gets us to think about words in different ways. When we write poems like the limerick or the sonnet, we end up considering rhyme patterns. When we write poems like haiku and cinquain, we count the syllables.  When we write poems like the triolet or the rictameter, we consider the impact of refrains and the effectiveness of repetition. This month we’re looking at the diamond poem and considering word classes.
Ass
Plump, Round
Quivers, trembles, anticipates
Hand, paddle, crop, cane.
Shouting, shrieking, screaming
Reddened, punished
Cheeks

The diamond poem is seven lines long. 1 x noun, 2 x adjective, 3 x verb, 4 x noun, 3 x verb, 2 x adjective, 1 x noun. 

As I mentioned before, the benefits from this exercise are considering word classes and how they are used. Also, as a piece of concrete poetry, I do think diamond poems look pretty on the page. Another added bonus is, because of the absence of prepositions, they tend to sound like ‘proper’ poetry.

Toys
Hidden, forbidden
Buzzing, sliding, gyrating
Dildos, clamps, clips, vibrators
Plug, Play, Please
Private, adult
Toys


As always, I look forward to seeing your diamond poems in the comments box below. 

11 comments:


  1. bear
    grey-haired, hoary
    slapping, biting, punching
    cuffs, clamps, spreader-bar, gag
    moaning, sobbing, pleading
    wet, needy
    cub

    no idea how to centre it, sorry!

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    1. Rachel,

      I'm not sure how to do the centring thing myself in the comments.

      Quality work as always - and the cute inclusion of a hyphen in spreader-bar makes it all the more visually pleasurable.

      Ash

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  2. My girlfriend is a natural blue head.
    A virgin, with a pierced labia.
    Not so much a dog walker, as a member of their pack.
    Pop rock & infinity pools.
    Goose stepping backwards; rewinding history's odometer.
    Selling it as new.

    -Marc Breed
    An Ohio Poet Laureate candidate

    http://topclevelandartists.blogspot.com

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  3. Stanley,

    Thanks for sharing Marc's poem here. I can see it doesn't fit the restrictive form of the diamond poetry but it's a stylish piece of writing. It's one of those that makes me reconsider the dualities in every line.

    Thank you,

    Ash

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  4.               In the Rough
                By Lisabet Sarai

                  Consent.
               Naive. Eager.
           Undress, possess, invade.
         Ropes, whips, marks, tears,
              Punished, cherished.
                  Gratitude.

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    1. Lovely. I think the internal rhymes work so well on this piece, making it flow and giving it a delightful pace.

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