tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7396437919069310850.post7608620260654650010..comments2023-05-30T08:29:42.770-04:00Comments on The Erotica Readers & Writers Association Blog: Writing ExerciseCroco Designshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04417265522875605547noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7396437919069310850.post-29941959735586673472014-07-28T04:23:52.410-04:002014-07-28T04:23:52.410-04:00Thanks Ash. My English dialect creeping in, I thin...Thanks Ash. My English dialect creeping in, I think :) My morning routine is to write a cinquain, a haiky, a tanka and a sevenling before I do anything else, has been for about ten years. The cinquains I generally use for plotting novels, and this one concerns the deflowering of a girl by an older man,Rachel Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7396437919069310850.post-17081648460979493872014-07-28T03:57:43.345-04:002014-07-28T03:57:43.345-04:00Rachel - it's been too long.
The thing I love...Rachel - it's been too long.<br /><br />The thing I love about this one (even though you've taken a grim turn with the content) is that your voice is so clear in this:<br /><br />You pronounce 'fumbling' as FUM-BLING (not fum-BULL-ing).<br /><br />You pronounce beer with a single broad vowel sound in the middle, rather than as a two syllable word (BE-ARR).<br /><br />Lovely use of the form :-)Ashley Listerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11997769708965362938noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7396437919069310850.post-84743761600379179012014-07-28T03:39:15.122-04:002014-07-28T03:39:15.122-04:00fumbling
his calloused hands
unhooking her bra str...fumbling<br />his calloused hands<br />unhooking her bra strap<br />his breath smells of beer and ciggies<br />age gapRachel Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7396437919069310850.post-75574957431886527012014-07-06T04:43:07.774-04:002014-07-06T04:43:07.774-04:00Hi Lisabet,
This is, indeed, the unfortunately na...Hi Lisabet,<br /><br />This is, indeed, the unfortunately named Ms Crapsey. Look forward to seeing your response :-)<br /><br />AshAshley Listerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11997769708965362938noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7396437919069310850.post-22513324428231989982014-07-06T00:37:00.780-04:002014-07-06T00:37:00.780-04:00And is the photo really of sweet Adelaide?
Thanks...And is the photo really of sweet Adelaide?<br /><br />Thanks for another challenge, Ash.Lisabet Saraihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05162514190572269660noreply@blogger.com